This cannot be directed to me as I already stated I will rewrite it.RickD wrote:I'm calling the grammar police. You will be charged with a misdemeanor for butchering the English language.
Poem Heaven's shore
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But examine everything carefully; hold fast to that which is good.
-- 1 Thessalonians 5:21
For I am confident of this very thing, that He who began a good work in you will perfect it until the day of Christ Jesus.
-- Philippians 1:6
#foreverinmyheart
-- 1 Thessalonians 5:21
For I am confident of this very thing, that He who began a good work in you will perfect it until the day of Christ Jesus.
-- Philippians 1:6
#foreverinmyheart
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Re: Poem Heaven's shore
RICKY !!!!1over137 wrote:This cannot be directed to me as I already stated I will rewrite it.RickD wrote:I'm calling the grammar police. You will be charged with a misdemeanor for butchering the English language.
that figures...
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Am replacing the second verse with this:
In the ocean want to swim
And forever sing your hymn
Make me shining, am just dim
Make me of light, do the trim.
In the ocean want to swim
And forever sing your hymn
Make me shining, am just dim
Make me of light, do the trim.
But examine everything carefully; hold fast to that which is good.
-- 1 Thessalonians 5:21
For I am confident of this very thing, that He who began a good work in you will perfect it until the day of Christ Jesus.
-- Philippians 1:6
#foreverinmyheart
-- 1 Thessalonians 5:21
For I am confident of this very thing, that He who began a good work in you will perfect it until the day of Christ Jesus.
-- Philippians 1:6
#foreverinmyheart
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Re: Poem Heaven's shore
Me gusta, Hanacita!1over137 wrote:Am replacing the second verse with this:
In the ocean want to swim
And forever sing your hymn
Make me shining, am just dim
Make me of light, do the trim.
John 5:24
24 “Truly, truly, I say to you, he who hears My word, and believes Him who sent Me, has eternal life, and does not come into judgment, but has passed out of death into life.
“A nation of sheep will beget a government of wolves.”
-Edward R Murrow
St. Richard the Sarcastic--The Patron Saint of Irony
24 “Truly, truly, I say to you, he who hears My word, and believes Him who sent Me, has eternal life, and does not come into judgment, but has passed out of death into life.
“A nation of sheep will beget a government of wolves.”
-Edward R Murrow
St. Richard the Sarcastic--The Patron Saint of Irony
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Re: Poem Heaven's shore
I fixed grammar errors (I hope)
Here is updated version
Heaven's shore
Having been on Heaven's shore
Nothing can do but adore
You, Your glory, of love core
Please do never close this door.
Forgive me 'cause I have sinned
Without You I cannot win
Over darkness we fall in
Such a lost soul I have been.
In your sea I want to swim
And forever sing your hymn
Make me shining, am just dim
Make me of light, do the trim.
Teach my soul to do the right
Give me wisdom, give me sight
Make me stronger for the fight
Over darkness, over night.
Having been on Heaven's shore
Nothing can do but adore
You, Your glory, of love core
Love You each time even more.
P.S. Thank you guys for helping me to perfect it
Here is updated version
Heaven's shore
Having been on Heaven's shore
Nothing can do but adore
You, Your glory, of love core
Please do never close this door.
Forgive me 'cause I have sinned
Without You I cannot win
Over darkness we fall in
Such a lost soul I have been.
In your sea I want to swim
And forever sing your hymn
Make me shining, am just dim
Make me of light, do the trim.
Teach my soul to do the right
Give me wisdom, give me sight
Make me stronger for the fight
Over darkness, over night.
Having been on Heaven's shore
Nothing can do but adore
You, Your glory, of love core
Love You each time even more.
P.S. Thank you guys for helping me to perfect it
But examine everything carefully; hold fast to that which is good.
-- 1 Thessalonians 5:21
For I am confident of this very thing, that He who began a good work in you will perfect it until the day of Christ Jesus.
-- Philippians 1:6
#foreverinmyheart
-- 1 Thessalonians 5:21
For I am confident of this very thing, that He who began a good work in you will perfect it until the day of Christ Jesus.
-- Philippians 1:6
#foreverinmyheart
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Re: Poem Heaven's shore
Final version
Heaven's shore
Having been on Heaven's shore
Nothing's left but to adore
You, Your glory, love's Your core
Please do never close this door.
Forgive me for I have sinned
Without You I cannot win
Over darkness we fall in
Such a lost soul I have been.
In the sea I want to swim
And forever sing a hymn
Make me shining, I am dim
Make me a light, wick do trim.
Teach my soul to do the right
Give me wisdom, give me sight
Make me stronger for the fight
Over darkness, over night.
Having been on Heaven's shore
Nothing's left but to adore
You, Your glory, love's Your core
Love You each time even more.
Heaven's shore
Having been on Heaven's shore
Nothing's left but to adore
You, Your glory, love's Your core
Please do never close this door.
Forgive me for I have sinned
Without You I cannot win
Over darkness we fall in
Such a lost soul I have been.
In the sea I want to swim
And forever sing a hymn
Make me shining, I am dim
Make me a light, wick do trim.
Teach my soul to do the right
Give me wisdom, give me sight
Make me stronger for the fight
Over darkness, over night.
Having been on Heaven's shore
Nothing's left but to adore
You, Your glory, love's Your core
Love You each time even more.
But examine everything carefully; hold fast to that which is good.
-- 1 Thessalonians 5:21
For I am confident of this very thing, that He who began a good work in you will perfect it until the day of Christ Jesus.
-- Philippians 1:6
#foreverinmyheart
-- 1 Thessalonians 5:21
For I am confident of this very thing, that He who began a good work in you will perfect it until the day of Christ Jesus.
-- Philippians 1:6
#foreverinmyheart
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Re: Poem Heaven's shore
Okay Dr Hana,
you changed it so I'll need to rework the music a bit too...
you changed it so I'll need to rework the music a bit too...
Science is man's invention - creation is God's
(by B. W. Melvin)
Old Polish Proverb:
Not my Circus....not my monkeys
(by B. W. Melvin)
Old Polish Proverb:
Not my Circus....not my monkeys
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Well, but now it is more grammatically correct. Hope your changes are easy.B. W. wrote:Okay Dr Hana,
you changed it so I'll need to rework the music a bit too...
But examine everything carefully; hold fast to that which is good.
-- 1 Thessalonians 5:21
For I am confident of this very thing, that He who began a good work in you will perfect it until the day of Christ Jesus.
-- Philippians 1:6
#foreverinmyheart
-- 1 Thessalonians 5:21
For I am confident of this very thing, that He who began a good work in you will perfect it until the day of Christ Jesus.
-- Philippians 1:6
#foreverinmyheart