1over137 wrote:Am still waitingB. W. wrote:like it - perfect - excellent !! You have the gift!1over137 wrote:Am finished. I hope you like it. (If not then hmmm...)
Heaven's shore
Having been on Heaven's shore
Can't do nothing but adore
You, Your glory, of love core
Please do never close this door.
Forgive me cause I have sinned
Without You I cannot win
Over darkness we fall in
Don't want return where I've been.
In the ocean I want swim
Eternity spend with Him
Make me shining, am just dim
Make me of light, do the trim.
Teach my soul to do the right
Give me wisdom, give me sight
Make me stronger for the fight
Over darkness, over night.
Having been on Heaven's shore
Can't do nothing but adore
You, Your glory, of love core
Love You each time even more.
I can use the last verse of each stanza segment for a refrain...
Fits Perfectly... once I get the music worked out, I'll sent you an MP3 download and see if you like rhythm...
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I know, as soon as I can do a recording - rough draft - I'll send it to you. My singing is not too good... Maybe next week...
PS - what is your new last name?
Also I may need to change this stanza - Eternity spend with Him -to- Jesus Eternity spend with You - would you mind? does it fit what you were conveying?
In the ocean I want swim
Jesus Eternity spend with You
Make me shining, am just dim
Make me of light, do the trim.
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