Evidence for God from Science

RickD wrote:I'm calling the grammar police. You will be charged with a misdemeanor for butchering the English language.

This cannot be directed to me as I already stated I will rewrite it.

1over137 wrote:

RickD wrote:I'm calling the grammar police. You will be charged with a misdemeanor for butchering the English language.

This cannot be directed to me as I already stated I will rewrite it.

RICKY !!!!

that figures...


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Am replacing the second verse with this:

In the ocean want to swim
And forever sing your hymn
Make me shining, am just dim
Make me of light, do the trim.

1over137 wrote:Am replacing the second verse with this:

In the ocean want to swim
And forever sing your hymn
Make me shining, am just dim
Make me of light, do the trim.

Me gusta, Hanacita!

I fixed grammar errors (I hope)

Here is updated version

Heaven's shore

Having been on Heaven's shore
Nothing can do but adore
You, Your glory, of love core
Please do never close this door.

Forgive me 'cause I have sinned
Without You I cannot win
Over darkness we fall in
Such a lost soul I have been.

In your sea I want to swim
And forever sing your hymn
Make me shining, am just dim
Make me of light, do the trim.

Teach my soul to do the right
Give me wisdom, give me sight
Make me stronger for the fight
Over darkness, over night.

Having been on Heaven's shore
Nothing can do but adore
You, Your glory, of love core
Love You each time even more.

P.S. Thank you guys for helping me to perfect it

Final version

Heaven's shore

Having been on Heaven's shore
Nothing's left but to adore
You, Your glory, love's Your core
Please do never close this door.

Forgive me for I have sinned
Without You I cannot win
Over darkness we fall in
Such a lost soul I have been.

In the sea I want to swim
And forever sing a hymn
Make me shining, I am dim
Make me a light, wick do trim.

Teach my soul to do the right
Give me wisdom, give me sight
Make me stronger for the fight
Over darkness, over night.

Having been on Heaven's shore
Nothing's left but to adore
You, Your glory, love's Your core
Love You each time even more.

Okay Dr Hana,

you changed it so I'll need to rework the music a bit too...

B. W. wrote:Okay Dr Hana,

you changed it so I'll need to rework the music a bit too...

Well, but now it is more grammatically correct. Hope your changes are easy.